kyara
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Jeremy
Jun 7, 2016 10:37:01 GMT -5
Post by kyara on Jun 7, 2016 10:37:01 GMT -5
In the story there is one character who reminds me of myself. This character is named Jeremy Simms. He is a friend to the Logan kids. There are three reasons why I relate to Jeremy. The first reason is because I am very different than my family. My family would rather be in the park and comes off very judgemental yet, I am very understanding and I would rather be in a book than outside. Jeremy is not racist like his family and treats everyone with respect. Also I love to be in the trees listening to the song of the birds and hearing the whistling wind against the blanket of leaves. Finally we both prefer to hang out with people who are different than me and have a different situation.
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Jeremy
Jun 8, 2016 14:08:15 GMT -5
Post by Arielle Rocha on Jun 8, 2016 14:08:15 GMT -5
I see what you mean and I totally agree with you. What I have to say, is that you should probably be checking the form you write in and the punctuation. On a few of your line, you forgot to insert commas. Also, some of your lines don't really make sense to me, but that could just be that I'm not reading them right. Still, I think you should write in a way that the reader can understand.
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